Friday, July 15, 2011

Flash Fiction Blogfest!

Today I'm participating in Ali Cross's Flash Fiction Blogfest! The topic extraordinaire, was to write a 250-word-or-less piece of flash fiction along the theme of:

"Its Independence Day and something unexpected happens..."

Independence Day? Oh yes. I can DO Independence Day!!

The expert I chose to write is from Book 3 of Keepers of the Flame, which, no, has NOT been written. But because I'm smart and all that, I already know what the final battle will be like. And I know who dies. And its very heroic and beautiful and I thought: "Wow, Self, this blogfest would be the perfect opportunity to write a few brief words from the final battle scene!"

Self is very obedient. So self complied.

Below is my 250-word snap shot flash fiction of what happens at the end of my trilogy, Keepers of the Flame. I wrote this in honor of the blogfest, so the rest of the trilogy has not been completed. As such, I reserve the right to CHANGE this scene, once I actually get to it in the writing process. But this is how it looks in my head right now. Enjoy!


The night sky brightened, illuminating the battlefield under a shower of sparks. Flame followed. Tongues of fire billowed, spewing tendrils through the dark as fuel ignited, burning in peculiar patterns of splattering light. Like fireworks.

Nate smiled.

Their plan had worked. The command center was destroyed, and with it, the weapons of the enemy rendered useless.

In the wake of the explosion, an eerie quiet covered the combat zone. Nothing stirred. The night still, like the blanketing calm after a storm.

Nate’s ears pricked up at a soft rumble of sound. He strained to hear over the pop pop of the fire, burning bright behind him.

Voices.

The sound amplified, rolling through the air like the roar of approaching thunder. The individual voices blended together, gaining strength as they united as one. Louder they sounded, cheers of freedom echoing through the night as Nate’s comrades celebrated the battle’s unexpected turn.

“Huzzah! Huzzah! Huzzah!”

I should be with them. Nate tried to sit and winced, the warmth in his side blossoming. He could feel the blood spilling from his wound, coloring the ground red.

He glanced at his watch. Almost midnight. The timepiece ticked its methodic journey towards a new Independence Day. One to remember and recommit. To honor new sacrifices of the great living and dead who fought for freedom and liberty.

Nate wouldn’t see it.

But the future would. At right now, that was all that mattered.


P.s. For those of you who have a) read Keepers of the Flame and b) are mildly obsessive about spoilers (ahem, LAUREN!), I've changed the names. You'll just have to lose sleep over this scene at night trying to figure out who meets his (or her! I could have changed genders too...) heroic end at the final battle. Bahahahahahaha!!! 

19 comments:

Kayeleen Hamblin said...

Wow. That's an ending. Now I want to know everything that came before it.

Lacie Myers said...

This is awesome! I knew nothing of your writing before today, but now I want to get my hands on your books. Hooray for the blogfest!

Julie said...

Kayeleen: thank you! I'm so glad you liked it ( : I have a few chapters from book 1 under the "Sample Chapters" tab if you're interested!

Lacie: Aw, you're makin' me blush! Thanks for the compliments! Agreed... woot, woot for blogfest!

Mel Fowler said...

Love spoilers. Good job!

Dawn M. Hamsher said...

Too bad Nate died. I'm sure he'll be a main character and the book reader will get all upset that you've killed him off. :0(

This was as good post for the topic. Independence always comes with a price.

The Write Soil

Julie said...

Mel: crazy girl! You're like my friend Lauren... can't get enough of spoilers. Me? I like to read things start to finish! No hints, please! Haha ( :

Dawn: What can I say? I can't fight my characters! They dictate the story, not me!

But I must say, this particular death is beautiful and when in context with the rest of the story, is needed to drive the moral home that indepdendence comes with a price, just like you said.

Thanks for the comments, girls!

Karen Hoover said...

Very well written. I was moved.

Brianna said...

So beautifully tragic!

Canda said...

Beautifully written, emotional. Love it.

Donna K. Weaver said...

Clever girl with the spoiler protection.

BEAUTIFUL language.

So when can I read it? ;)

Jenn Wilks said...

You could have just named him/her Pat. (remember those old SNL skits? LOL)

I really enjoyed your piece. Independence definitely comes with a price, and I'm so grateful to those who have been willing to pay it. <3

ali said...

I love this! And that it comes from a WIP is all the more cool!

Thanks for participating Julie!

Mary Campbell said...

Nice scene. All the little details made me feel like I was right there. I really like the cover for your book Keepers of the Flame - it intrigues me.

Stacy Henrie said...

Great ending! So cool it comes from something you're writing.

Julie said...

Wow, I'm overwhelmed! Your comments are all so great! Thank you for the lovely compliments and encouragment ( :

For those who expressed interest in reading more, I have chapters from book one posted under the "Sample Chapters" tab. Happy reading!

Nisa said...

Oh, sad! I'm sure it will be much more poignant when put with the rest of the story, but I loved the imagery and emotion.

Julie said...

Nisa: I'm hoping it will be poignant... I think it will be ( : Glad you enjoyed the sneak peak! And no worries, the overall story has a happy ending!

Ishta Mercurio said...

I love the way you described this scene - tiny details, but oh, so important. Thanks for sharing!

Julie said...

Ishta: Thanks, girl! So glad you liked it!

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